[2097] Pin-Up Girl Chapter 1
Got some really good and honest feedback on my last post that inspired me to take a completely different approach to the character and the narration in my novel. I took a lot of the suggestions to heart and re-wrote the first chapter to begin at a completely different point with a different voice. Wanted to test the waters with this re-write before I get too deep into editing the rest of the story. Looking for specific feedback related to impressions of the character and anything else you've got.
Also looking for suggestions as to what genre to classify this: I don't think it's quite literary fiction but not exactly commercial fiction either.
Here's the novel summary (which will be edited after finishing the next draft)
In the summer of 2018, Sage Kahrs wraps up her junior year of college struggling with grades and substance abuse. She is bright and altruistic, but impulsive. Following a confrontation with her dysfunctional family, Sage makes a series of spontaneous decisions that lead her to meeting Tyler, an attractive and charming photographer traveling the country in his built-out van. Fleeing an unfulfilling collegiate life and latching onto what seems to be a predestined twist of fate, Sage accepts Tyler’s invitation to join him in his cross-country van travels through various national parks. The two of them kindle an intense attraction that leads to a passionate yet tumultuous relationship. Their combined creativity and ambition generate an Instagram account that launches Sage into the spotlight and presents a timely opportunity for the two of them to leverage a profit, though simultaneously challenges the foundation of their relationship. Throughout the summer, Sage’s careless decisions land her in problematic situations as she wrestles with more personal issues than she acknowledges. Pin-Up Girl is an intimate and messy tale of grief, privilege, the Gen Z American Dream, and the strife of growing up as a woman in the internet age.
And my critiques:
Posted Apr 8, 2022, 8:01 PM UTC