Be still my heart... This is absolutely lovely. I’m a sucker for anything to do with mythology and controversial religious themes. 
  
All the references to water... “liquid” “washing away” “submerge me,” I can only assume you’re alluding to the Red Sea in your metaphors. Though “submerge me” may be a double entendre for submitting to  Lilith’s romantic preference to have her mate beneath her. Am I interpreting that right?
  
“Monochrome feathers” from when she flew from heaven, “demise spill sweet scarlet” alluding to her ties to cannibalism... all perfect imagery. 
  
Very well done. A pleasure to read.

I don't have much to offer other than this was a pleasure to read. It reminds me of Poe, only with more urgency. The state of being neither here nor there, but devoted otherwise, is something that defines our age.


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The imagery reeks of the concept of sensory deprivation, but it clearly isn’t about that, that feeling is just used as a metaphor for the actual motivation behind the lines. I like how you use imagery to create a metaphor to describe what you’re feeling, instead of using one directly within the text.

&amp;#x200B;

Twin seekers unbolted matters not

For black is equal to those of the dead and the living

Her liquid embrace fill my lungs and pores

Washing away my color

&amp;#x200B;

I am

neither breathing

nor

bleeding

&amp;#x200B;

Submerge me deeper, Lilith

Let us make love eternally

Lest my demise spill sweet scarlet

On your monochrome feathers

&amp;#x200B;

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Palette of Sorrow