i am very much an amateur, but I really like the flow of this! The realization of being able to see everything for what it is definitely stands out to me and the allusion to fantasy also.


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I don't quite know what this makes me think about, but I like the theme of falling and being taken in by a kind of a space or something. Apart from that, I really like the writing, especially the last 4 lines. Keep writing mate!

No, sincerely a compliment

Edit: it's a neat trick whether intentional or not. You did good.

Lol thanks I think? Is that a compliment or an insult?

What's neat about this is the ability to read it backwards without changing much meaning

Just that the subject of your poem deals with a general concept and your lines hold to the theme and don't digress to a specific instance. In other words your beginning and end concern the same issue, this when you read it backwards it doesn't change the meaning of what you're saying. Try that with some other poem here .

Thanks! What do you mean the strokes are broad enough?

Having read this poem,I also read the comments and the one about reading it backwards strikes true. The strokes of the poem are broad enough to make this possible. The only thing was a little overdone even though used only twice, was the use of " dark". You may be trying to intimate a sinister aspect to understanding the real reasons or motivation s for what is said or done, but I would suggest using a different word at either point. Also the" dark wizard" seems a bit out of place and more in keeping with a fantasy especially since there is no association to the meaning of dark wizard.

Yes that’s what I meant! It’s a little disorienting at first

Thanks for commenting! What do you mean by “the theme of inverse shines though”, because it takes a few times reading to orient yourself through the poem?

I also think that this poem is almost easier reading it backwards but that’s what makes it unique. To me it also reads like a limerick weather intentional or not. The theme of inverse shines through as it takes a couple times reading to orient yourself through the poem.

I love the flow, I personally am wondering, is your initial inspiration for this a break up? Or the transition the honeymoon phase? That's the vibe I ended up getting from this.

It's a nice pair of words that looks really well together - especially with the repeat "m" sound

Lol why are you proud of “mystic man”?

Woah, it's not easy to write with this type of flow! Also, the "mystic man", you must be super proud of that because I sure am!!!!

Hmm that’s a little vague but ok if u say so

I like *anything* that has the truth in it.. ;)

I entered a world of inverse meaning

To its strangeness and novelty, the mystic man  leaning

Yet after the initial fascination

You find yourself in a dark animation

When all is backward it makes you see

The truth of how things are supposed to be



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Backward?