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I love the story that unfolds, you verbalized it so well that I felt like I was there - it transported me back to that place. I especially love the ending.

I was on the verge of tears towards the end. Wow. That was great.

I love this poem, so much. Starts with some incredible imagery and verbiage that is so wonderfully raw and real. And the honesty of the last lines! I think you did a great job of displaying how fantastic and also terrible things can be at the same time. All this love, this glistening romance, simultaneously with self-criticism and confusion - illustrated so well!

Oh yeah. Good job. I felt it. Great imagery. Wet, envelopes me. Sexy just out of reach.

 Cascading from the sky,

Rivulets of water run down my window,

The car engine is humming.

&amp;#x200B;

She's sitting next to me there, 

In the passenger seat,

&amp;#x200B;

Soaked and laughing, our wet bodies collide. 

&amp;#x200B;

Her love envelops my being,

I no longer notice the rain.

&amp;#x200B;

Her pupils dilate as she stares into my soul, everything is laid bare,

I willingly become naked before her.

&amp;#x200B;

Drunk on her gaze, 

I fall in love, and then begin to cry, 

I can’t recognize the person I see reflected in her eyes.

&amp;#x200B;

1: [https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uxvqie/when\_i\_die/](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uxvqie/when_i_die/)

2: [https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uyat5w/if\_i\_had\_your\_mother/](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uyat5w/if_i_had_your_mother/)

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