This made me tear up a little. Thank you.

Itt's never too late to watch the stars together. Everytime you look up to the sky,there's a chance a thousand other people are looking at the same stars as you are. It really is what unites us.  Every if you hate someone, even if you haven't seen them in decades, a shared stargaze will always bring you closer, unconsciously or not. Keep up the dreams, keep up the poetry. The stars won't ever leave you, even when they hide in the day.

this is so sad but so pretty. i'm a sucker for anything to do with the stars. It's such a romantic notion to gaze up at the stars. 

I also love the word blithe. I just love the way it sounds.

Fave line: but these blithe dreams didn't last

Delicious poem. I ate it up. Keep doing stuff.


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Sometimes the past *can* hurt the present.

The past is the past, it cannot hurt the present. The past is forgotten, the future is bright

I don't know. I don't want it to be final, but we cannot change the past.

The original poem I wrote was:

It's too late to watch the stars together
Everything we had is past.
I fantasized a new beginning
But these blithe dreams didn't last.

The words we've left unspoken
Shall forever stay that way;
And my heart is still so broken.
I may never be okay.

But then I realized that the second verse also had the first and third lines rhyming, which made it feel uneven so I changed it. I also made the lines go 7 syllables, then 5 syllables, then 7, etc. All of the comments here are from before the change and I doubt any more commenters will come because the post is a day old now, but if they do I'll edit this comment.

Watching the stars, just you and me?  
No, what we had is now past.  
My hope was just a fantasy  
But those blithe dreams didn't last.  
  
So the words we've left unspoken  
Shall forever stay that way;  
And my heart is still so broken.  
I may never be okay.  

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[1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uz8mm4/comment/ia9ocka/) [2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uzdbk4/comment/ia9nwl9/)

Also, this is sort of a sequel/update to [another poem](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/uux4ly/can_we_watch_the_stars_all_night/) I wrote.

Too late