Wow powerful! Also being brunette is way more fun.

I really enjoyed this, it's simple, clear, and entertaining to read. Everyone can relate to wanting to change something about themselves. I really like the lines "I'd feel so much safer in golden skin... Red wont invite you in". Your word play is very creative. If there was anything to improve I would say I think the ending could use more of a "punch" with a really clever line for the reader to remember. Other than this great job.


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Beautiful poem, great mixing characterization with imagery, interesting rhyme scheme.

Also- I think I’m the only one that realized it, but there’s four parts to the poem.

The first part, she emphasizes the letter ‘s’, the second, she emphasizes ‘h’- the third she emphasizes ‘i’, and the fourth she emphasizes ‘t’.

Because, the whole theme of the poem is that being a brunette is SHIT.

Get it?

Wow, this is really good. 
Your rhythm is fun and catchy 

As a brunette myself I related to this poems sentiment and feelings that it conveyed 

While reading I felt kinda transported to my younger teenage self on a beach in the summer battling my insecurities as one does at tht age as a female 

My favorite line is “doors would be so much lighter” bc of the meaning I get out of it and the fallacy I was convinced w when I was younger

I love being brunette and I love read heads even more. I love the first two lines the most. Great reference and even flow of rhyming.

This really gave imagery of what it would feel like to be sitting out in the sun. It also gave imagery to me of a crazy tan obsessed person, especially the  "I must pluck and then pluck,"

I liked how you only had one line with no rhymes. This really encompasses what it's like to be on the beach. A lot of bright and soft imagery, with a little bit of harshnesses like the plucking and bleaching.

I really enjoyed this! The language is easy going but to the point and still structured well!

love the idea that doors to things are different weights for different people, very thoughtful.

the things I want never quite feel  in reach

a Snow White brunette on a stranded beach.

There’s safety in hair the color of honey,

bronzed skin white teeth 

guys like when it’s sunny. 

I’d feel so much safer in golden skin,

Mine sizzles under sun.

Red won’t invite you in.

Doors would be so much lighter,

With lemon colored hair 

Soft butter skin, like touching the air 

Dark brown hairs, I must pluck and then pluck 

wishing for the sun to come bleach me in luck. 

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Please god just make me blonde