Holy cow this poem is amazing. I had to read through it several times and I love it. Definitely going to save this and look out for other stuff you've written.

Is it displaying everything as one big line?

Hey,
I'm not an English scholar but I wanted to say that I love how you present natural insecurity amongst people. How both the speaker and who is spoken both feel pathetic. I personally think it's uplifting in the sense that the reader reads this and reflects on their life and how others view it and realise that it's a common trait amongst people.

On another note, did you know you need to have a double space for it to appear as single lines? 

Hope the feedback is ok :)

Sorry, wrote this on the fly today and forgot to properly punctuate some portions.

There is a lot of good in the world. A lot less in me.

I love this poem! It’s expresses so many beautiful and realistic sentiments into a relatable poem that’s also very well written and organized. Your choice of punctuation is very intriguing but works well and does not hinder the poem, as well as when you made the decision to split the poem into two stanzas. The ending hits very hard and is also a good ending to the poem, as tragically realistic and relatable as it it. The author believes in the goodness of the world, of others, but not themself.

You have a lot of time ahead of you for things to get better. And they will.

Well, I’m a teenager, so hopefully that helps.

Very kind of you.

At the same time, it hurts knowing others feel the same way.

This poem is so relatable I can’t even analyze it like damn fr bro


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It's recounting the past to someone who matters and explaining how life now shows that they were never what they felt.

Meanwhile, all the fears of the other, who found solace in comfort, are just realized by being in the same place.

Wow I like this a lot. The back and forth between the you and I is in such a way it seems to me like they could be saying the same things to each other. Or perhaps the you and I are the same person. A last version of oneself speaking to the future.

I hope this helps this man. Me, Him, or Him?

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/v6slkd/half_of_me/ibjf8w0?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share&context=3

This will definitely help everyone. But I cannot save myself. Not by myself. How pathetic. Shall we not be so pathetic together?

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/v7ahjc/when_i_know_you_know_you_know/?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share

"Pathetic," you would say,  
Spoken of your own life.  
Wrapped in doubt and sorrow,  
Words that cut like a knife.  
Feeling trapped and useless,  
Like you would never grow.  
I would answer truly:  
You're worth more than you know.  


Time and love have healed you  
Your life now like a dream  
Without doubt you've noticed  
Things were not like they seem.  
Now your eyes are open  
Now you can truly see  
You are not pathetic  
The one who is, is me.

[1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/v6xwl0/wind/) [2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/v6slkd/half_of_me/)