There was a time, once,
when I had dreams
and I could hold them
like fruit
in the palm of my hand.
And as I grew
so, too, did my dreams;
no longer could I hold them all -
these fruits of my battered, wanting mind -
the ones it hurt the most to let go
were the ones I'd held the longest.
Posted Jun 26, 2022, 7:50 PM UTC
I love this, but I want more! I can see that there’s something here, something you may have had in mind while writing it. What type of fruit were you imagining? I like that it is simple/clean and causes the reader to think. However it leaves me with questions :) I liked reading it
Thank you truly for the feedback.
In terms of what type of fruit, I had various kinds come to mind, but I wanted the reader to be able to empathize as well, so I left it open-ended; that way, the reader's mind could picture their own variety of fruit.
Because we're all different people, with different dreams, but we've all had to let many of them go as we got older - that is what I wanted to convey.
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This is spectacular!!
Amazing! You seemed to perfectly illustrate how we have to let go of dreams as we get older. I felt sort of sad reading it. But in a way it opened my eyes to how my dreams have faded as I’ve gotten older.
Thank you for your feedback.
To hear someone else say that I got something right for them to see, fills me with a peace that at the very least, my writing did what it was supposed to for the person who saw it.