[1601] Starved Vines, part 1

EDIT: Thank you for your input, everyone! I have enough comments to begin editing. I will post a revised version soon.

This is part 1 of a short story I'm writing. It'll be 6000-7000 words when complete. I have no idea if it's great or utter crap, so I'd appreciate your uncensored, unabridged opinion. Comments are enabled on the Gdoc. Thanks in advance for putting in the time.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QhTQ7ZMMNv32Vcu9Ik4U2pwqQpIVh4wvlj2gzEB3mWE/edit?usp=sharing

My critiques:

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