Starvation

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The author here expresses their feelings of insecurity that prevent them from obtaining validation. At least that's how I read it. The poem is an okay piece of expressive poetry, but it could use better rhythm.

Love the imagery in this OP, it really makes you think and i Love that in a poem. I particularly like the first two lines, the description of losing yourself and not quite being able to find a justifiable reason for it is a haunting feeling and I think you've captured it really well.

One thing I would say is that the flow could be a bit smoother, some lines have too many or not enough syllables in my opinion, but that's just me! (example, in line 3 i would add two more syllables eg. 'All because I look at the mirror and see it's all too much' or something like that?)

One thing I always do is read my poems out loud again and again to get the rhythm.

Overall I really liked this, and I can feel the pain of the subject of this poem in a really poetic way, good job!

(also, i don't want to assume this is about yourself but if it is, I know it can be hard and almost impossible sometimes but just take everything one day at a time, you've so got this ❤️❤️)