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robynnc1290

A Poem For a Father I Didn’t Know

Poem

I don’t believe in heaven,

a vision of sunlight

or bright starry nights

above the clouds of white.

But, I want it for you

a quieter place to rest your mind.

When I fall asleep,

visit me in dreams,

at my bedside,

on your knees,

whisper a story

of your heavy journey.

I hope now that you see,

clear as an April spring,

instead of tangled between

your turbulent reveries.

I don’t believe in heaven,

but I have learned one lesson:

It’ll be easier now in the limitless sky.

So goodbye, goodbye, goodbye.

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Posted Jul 7, 2022, 5:15 PM UTC

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CharlieNixon1965•

There was something very peaceful about this piece. Whether it was about a celestial father in heaven or a incarnate one, there’s still something gentle about the poet’s willingness to allow others to have their private space and faith.

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robynnc1290OP•

Thank you so much! I love your interpretation.

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romanticizetocope•

that was beautiful. i loved the metaphors you used, and the flow it has to it especially in the second verse

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robynnc1290OP•

Thank you so much!!

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towneetowne•

yerself is steam

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