[1180] A Wrinkled Year

Hey. I wrote this short story. Genre-wise, I would say it's most akin to a myth, but correct me if I'm wrong. I don't really write short stories so any thoughts about it are appreciated. Especially prose though, which sentences work and which don't.

a wrinkled year

(Sorry to my southern hemisphere friends about the seasons.)

Crits:

[3499] KoE

[2013] Leech

[3086] Van Winkle