almost made me cry. too relatable and so well written too. being too scared to turn the things you want into reality is such a suffocating feeling

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this was absolutely amazing, relatable, and wonderfully written. the breaks are so powerful and i love the structure of it. honestly, it reminds me of moving itself. the piece flows so well, going from space to earth to dreams and fears―kinda like human thought/nature altogether. it's a big picture going into a little one, which is a great writing technique.

this piece is beautifully written and puts the unspeakable into words. thank you so much for writing and sharing!


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Aye man, that's reading the harsh realities of life. Very true. As always well written, my guy :")

I think im smellin what you're steppin in. Captivating. Great concept and well executed 😎

This poem is cathartic for me because I am trying to say the unspeakable.

The poetry is superb, but im lost with the title? Is it a poem searching for catharsis or did I miss it entirely? Regardless, it made me think and thats the point isn't it? Thanks for sharing!

definitely relatable, I really get the vibe of striving to be more but constantly being weighed down

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This is a really well written poem that I think is depicting the weight that comes on someone who is too afraid to trust, and afraid to try new things, but still wishes to live. Just a tiny thing is maybe here  


>Fear makes all things  
  
dark.

I think you were trying to put an emphasis on the affects of fear on a person, but I think put it together in one sentence wouldn't change it's impact either.

I am glad that it resonated so well with you! 

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I've only joined this subreddit today (like ltr) but wow, it's amazing to see a poem that resonates with my soul. I love how simple it is to understand, especially the emphasis on the "fear". The kind of fear you delivered in the poem also brings up the loss of it, I hope to see your works more.

I want to reach out to the stars,                 

but alas my hands can't grasp

the distant sky.

Nothing defies gravity. 

&amp;#x200B;

I want to rush like the mountain river

yet my heart can't trust 

the waterfall.

I am afraid of heights. 

&amp;#x200B;

I want to embrace 

each thing that lives around 

but intimacy scares me now. 

&amp;#x200B;

To try is futile 

to dream is a curse 

when you lack the strength 

to say what you want

and to do what your heart tells you. 

&amp;#x200B;

Fear makes all things 

dark. 

Passion is dead

and there is no fire

only the eternal autumn of Hades. 

This silence is annoying

a constant weight 

that tires my mind. 

&amp;#x200B;

I long for music

for light 

and for an answer to my call.

&amp;#x200B;

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Catharsis