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The Night

Poem

Lately I’ve been in my mind, lost to my supposed destiny

My intent for greatness, my desire for notoriety

I curl up on the beach, and my fingers clutch the sand

And there I will sob desperately, and hold them in my hand

And to myself I wonder, why do all the grains flow senselessly? Is this all there is to life, one battle won when just the next I see

Comes up on the horizon, a hovering cloud

A miasma is what’s coming dear, a storm will touch the ground

Rage, rage, against the night

The titan’s grip is not so tight, the titan’s grip

You’ll fight, you’ll fight, you’ll fight

The waves they will crash thunderously

And I will fight against the Titan’s clasp

In his grip, what strength will come to me

And the grains they will fall still

Like a sieve out of my grasp

Rage, rage, against the night

The titan’s grip is not so tight, the titan’s grip

You’ll fight, you’ll fight, you’ll fight

If greatness comes to those who wait then why still do I lie

All you need is love, they say, and you just have to try

Try to find your strength, the will to fight

Try and try and try and try

My destiny, I ache to find

Caught up in the memory, of a truly spotless mind

Eternal sunshine starts with you

In that light, I praise the shadows

For always, always, being kind

I want to fight

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Posted Aug 1, 2022, 9:37 AM UTC · edited

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AtreidesLeo•

I love how you used rage against the night as a homage to Dylan Thomas. It reminds me of a battle people in Australia are having since money grabbing realtors and builders put homes on flood plains. Every time they clean up the rains and floods returns. I hope you and me both find our destiny ;)

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[deleted]•

I love this interpretation!!! Thank you!! :D

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tacomonster817•

Really enjoyed the references you made here, I see the Edgar Allen Poe and Dylan Thomas. I feel the urge to rage (:

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[deleted]•

Hahaha yes!!!! Thank you!!

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Dismal-Ad3897•

I am totally new to reading poetry and totally new to writing poetry. Thank you for this poem. I really like this line: "If greatness comes to those who wait then why still do I lie" its so relatable and really brings light to the world we live in and the lies we are fed.

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[deleted]•

Thank you!! :)

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Ok-Presentation4063•

This is really beautiful!! Reminds me of a lot of things in my life. Great job! :]

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[deleted]•

Thank you! I'm really happy to hear that :D

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flumppppp•

This has a lot of potential and draws some really beautiful metaphors! I don't have time to write a full comment right now but just wanted to give you the quick spell check for 'siv' (sieve). Really great job, I enjoyed reading it! Also just a heads up, I'm not a mod in this sub but the rules are to link to two pieces of feedback and there's only one so it could get removed

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psychic_warfare•

Thank you! (also I'm super grateful for the spell check, no wonder why google kept red lining me)

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sammyjamez•

The phrase "Rage, rage, against the night" reminds me a lot of "Do not go gentle into that good night" by Dylan Thomas.

And from what I can gather in this poem, there is a conflict of interest between rebellion but also some form of repression or stigma.

It seems that the person is in the midst of a storm, an existential crisis of sorts, or perhaps a time where the person just wants to get out or run away.

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While at the same time, there is something deep inside that is stopping him/her from going all the way and taking that leap of faith.

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Am I correct?

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psychic_warfare•

Yes! There were quite a few references in here actually! The main one being Edgar Allen Poe's "Dream Within a Dream". I love your analysis, it's definitely accurate to my intention while writing. :) Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it.

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