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TheDrowsyJamie

CHAINS

Poem

CHAINS

I don’t love you anymore

Move fast and hit the floor

Red cascade upon the shore

Skipping down the violent score

A rhythm I’d love to break some more

Silent voices inside the bind

Passing over into grievance we define

Slow Limbo and reason for any sign

I’ll never love again tell me I’m fine

Eyes split so I see between the line

Purely loveless in soft obstinance

Kiss my thoughts and I’ll give into trance

Twirling fast and thinking slow, dance

Thinking of her without another chance

Pace quickens, I step, match, you’re stance

She loves you no more

Can’t move.. I’m on the floor

Crimson waves rough offshore

Ripping through the chords and score

The rhythm.. I’ll cry.. so sore

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Posted Aug 6, 2022, 1:19 PM UTC

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I love the rhythm of this. It's fast paced and heartbreaking at the very same time. The imageries are very clear yet leave room for the reader to create their own as well.

Thank you for sharing!

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TheDrowsyJamieOP•

Thank you (:

What rooms of interpretation did you have? I'm always curious sense I leave that room. I want to know what others fill it with.

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