yoo thanks for sharing. im going to give it a listen for sure

this was heavily inspired by the album 'faces' by mac miller, in-between jokey raps and awful punchlines is an underlying message about his drug problems. if you have never listend to the album, i suggest you give it a listen or just read all the lyrics.

i love this. i don’t really understand it, but i love it nonetheless. 
i really don’t know your intent or purpose, but i really like the undercase <<i be trying to die>> that is sandwiched between all caps. it reminds me of someone admitting something that makes them vulnerable, and then covering it up by making a joke or being exuberant or smth. the tone change from somber to confident was really well done i think. i would loveee to hear your thought process behind writing this because it’s definitely the kind of piece i don’t understand but want to understand . i’ve read it like 15 times already i think, lol.


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This a really fun poem. Reminds of a few different Ted Joan’s poem from his “black pow-wow” collection.

The use of bolded words is something a lot of people don’t utilize enough, it’s refreshing to see. I think people take poetry to serious and this is fun to see, to see people have fun with it for a change.

WHAT THE F\*CK

SH\*T

IS THAT YOU?

IS THAT ME???  
WHO THE H\*LL LET JESUS IN THE ROOM

WHO THE H\*LL LET MESUS IN THE ROOM

WHO WHO WHO WHO

WHO THE

YO WHAT

i be trying to die 

i be MAKING YOUR LIFE BETTER

CUZ IM IN IT

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&amp;#x200B;

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NAH HOMIE WHAT YOU MEAN YOU BuRIED THE BODY IN YO bACK YARD BRAH