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This is a great poem.

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What I like the most is this part:

drag it along. Don't you dare

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I like this because it is like the subject thought of doing this, but didn't. I like that imagery.

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I hope to see more from you: 10/10.

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The line “you moved through me like water once- inherent and vital” throws me from current droughts going on around the world to thinking of old loves. Powerful combination of words there!

I really enjoyed this piece, I’m often a fan of more gruesome/darker poetry and this fit that mood perfectly