Thank you for the kind words, there definitely is a longing in what I wrote hahahah. Also, though I'm usually not that into Romanticism when it comes to things I consume or create, sometimes it admittedly hits the spot.

I don't know why melancholic poetry reads so beautifully. There's a longing here. Maybe is why I'm so drawn to the Romantic period.

Thanks a lot for the feedback, glad the first two stanzas made you feel in the moment :) Nevertheless, as for the third stanza, I think I was going for what you said (going where you didn't expect it to), and I wanted it to leave a slightly bitter aftertaste, so also thanks for not enjoying the ending as much hahahah.

Ya just copy and paste them sorry they don’t have spacing just they are meant to.

Hey, checked out your poems and I really liked them. Your format seemed to tread a line between prose and poetry for me, and their content seemed very sincere in regards to what you felt.

Also glad you enjoyed what I wrote! I'm alright, maybe a bit lonely, but certainly been worse hahaha.

This is kind of what I do if you wanna check mine out, I hope you are alright and everything, love the soul part and to make it more interesting can use thesaurus for more interesting words, but this poem is 🥺

Huh, that's interesting. Can't say I've ever been exposed to Polynesian poetry. Do you have any good translations to recommend?

Thats okay. I've done indigenous poetry before as well. I've noticed that English poems are self indulgent but written to please the reader. However, Polynesian poetry is written to please the poet.

Thanks a lot for the kind words! Tbh the last two lines were the original idea around which I made the poem, so I'm glad it spoke to you.

im personally in love with the last line and think it wraps up the poem leaving the reader wanting more, its open to interpretation. I say keep it as opposed to the other comment. 


I know we will get some feedback and people offering suggestions on poems. But sometimes I think things should be left raw. Things should be written as they were felt. I enjoyed this poem.

Thank you for the feedback! Admittedly I wasn't feeling what you're describing in this poem, but obviously it resonates with everyone differently and I really liked what you said about reminiscing and nostalgia. Glad you enjoyed!

This poem really gives me nostalgia vibes. It reminds me of thinking back to better times and knowing the outcome or what follows may not be positive but the memories are still full of joy and life.

Thank for the kind words, glad you enjoyed!

I'm glad it resonated with you :), hope you manage well wherever you're going, best of luck friend.

I'm moving away from home to a place I hate for a job that I tolerate. This makes me wish I wasn't, and that I could stay here where the August nights are slightly cold, and the love of my family had kept me warm. Thank you for your poem it really resonated with me.


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Even though it is slightly cold

For a late August night

I do not wish to go back inside

I want us to stay out here

Forever

Or at least for one moment more,

&amp;#x200B;

And even though all I can make out

Is your messy golden hair

You have never been more beautiful

For I can feel your soul

Right next to mine;

&amp;#x200B;

I wish I could stay longer

But I always knew

I would be leaving too soon

Even though I was never there.

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

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Cold August Nights