[1737] The Cruel Hour

LINK --https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oCluuQ8qOsOh1YmVVqRfWwOTShxy-I0Xx-GGeFLpiLQ/edit?usp=sharing

Hello, I've got this start to a supernatural mystery I'd like some feedback on!

Any notes you'd like to give me would be wonderful, but I have some specific things I'd like thoughts on:

• Feelings on the title, and how it relates to the story? I don't like it much, but I'm not sure how else to title it so far.
• How well does the prose flow regarding the actions of Katrina and the other character?
• Thoughts on Katarina and her thought processes during the story, do they slow the story down, or do you find them worthwhile in showing off what she's like?
• While I'm thinking of continuing the supernatural element, I dislike the current explanation I have for them-- as a reader, where do you think the supernatural character came from, and what explanation would you find interesting, personally?

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