Short and sweet and packs a punch. Nice job :)

Im a sucker for nature in poetry. You worded it really well!

Open up my eyes needs to go, I think. “Arouse and awake that which ails me” might be better for the alliteration. These words may also contribute to the topics of longing and desiring another.

 the aesthetic aural beauty of the first lines of each stanza! Those are all beautiful thesis statements and you develop them in turn. This is such a beautiful poem. well done!

I've both felt this emotion and been in that scene you painted:/ this one hits hard haha. \*snaps


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 the breaking of the waves

open up my eyes

to that which ails me 

&amp;#x200B;

pieces of me die

at the thought of you

never loving me.

&amp;#x200B;

in the fading moonlight 

I sit by myself; I need you with me 

yet, I only have the white 

midnight moon to accompany me.

&amp;#x200B;

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Moonlit Midnight.