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HamboneOnHorn

Return to Sender

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To you I send

My affections dear

Your favorite things

To hold near

Wrapped in velvet

Tied with string

Many blessings my way you bring

On this package I write your name

To continue

This cat and mouse game

Days have passed

I get no letter

I check the box and read "return to sender"

This love I thought oh so requited

My advances towards you no longer invited

No longer as close as our lips once were

I wish nothing more than to get over her

"I don't feel the same" deep in my chest it stings

But how is it then I came to know your favorite things?

I take my heart off my sleeve

Can no longer face you as I grieve

"I wish you well" my mind speaks

But why is it only those born of trouble you seek?

I can not help you now that you've made this choice

To no longer stand behind your own voice

To be able to help someone is a trick of chance

But to want that help is a different dance

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Posted Sep 26, 2022, 4:46 PM UTC

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Superfam94•

Aaah sweet melancholia, wonder if this is alegoric for having your love returned to you or just pondering over having romantic interest's package returned. Great! You can play with punctuation a bit more when you want to be less explicit." I check the box, "return to sender"" for exaple here you can have the same effect by being less explicit and get those verses to match up!

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HamboneOnHornOP•

I wavered between forms of punctuation with this. Wrote it at 3 am while the feelings were clearest. I will revise it once I transfer it into my journal though.

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