What I really enjoyed was how you painted a picture of yourself doing something so mundane as observing a bug, while so many emotive reflections we're happening inside you. It's a such a good contrast between their seemingly simple lives and our complex inner reality. 
I hope it was a hopeful ending, and you didn't end up squashing it!

Thanks for the feedback. I see what you’re talking about. I’ll try to make it a little more of a smooth progression without a complete flip

I really enjoyed this, but found the last line too quick a change of opinion for me. I spent the whole poem trying to see your point of view, then it did a 180 in the last line!
I wonder if there's a way to alter the first lines of each stanza to show the progression of your questioning starting with "I'm glad" and becoming progressively less certain of yourself? 
Or you could turn a corner at the end and provide a little more dialogue with yourself in a different rhyme or meter that helps the reader question themselves as well?
But I repeat, I really enjoyed it.

This is a cute poem about the blissful state of being ignorant. Loved it thank you.

I love this poem! It’s such a cute concept. I like the transition between feeling sorry for the bug to feeling jealous, as well as the contrast between the bug’s seemingly-simple life and the narrator’s complex thoughts about it. I definitely agree that it would benefit from a smoother transition from pity to jealousy; I think it would make the ending and the overall message more powerful to the reader.

Amazing how it transversed the deep ideas into simple yet quirky lines. Really loved how not all poems should be painful and bliss.


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I'm glad I'm not a bug

Never being able to understand love

On their heartstrings love will never tug

Since they are only a bug

&amp;#x200B;

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I'm glad I'm not a bug

Never will they question the God above

Does he exist? They'll never ask, as they crawl across my kitchen rug

Since they are only a bug

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

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I'm glad I'm not a bug

They'll never understand the deep hurt of losing someone you care for

No tears will they shed, nor will an ounce of them care, like a man high on a drug.

Since they are only a bug

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

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I'm glad I'm not a bug

They never worry about poverty or disease

Never will they fear the coming of death, but will wander mindlessly through the world, so smug

Since they are only a bug

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

I'm glad I'm not a bug

Never have they asked, "why am I here."

In their meaningless lives they sit so snug

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

As a matter a fact, I don't think I'd mind being a bug

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

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I'm Glad I'm Not A Bug