This poem feels like a delightful nursery rhyme for conveying morals. The last couplet is very powerful, and conveys just how dangerous it is to seek only what is temporarily pleasing. I also think it is telling that the teeth are often a symbol of control, and the hole has been fashioned not just in the gnome's teeth but the deeper part of him - the soul - his inmost being.

“a cavity for feeling”. I liked that line a lot. Really cute, quirky poem. Bravo.


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Once upon a time  
In a forest upon a hill  
There was a hut upon the rock  
And inside lived a gnome. 

This gnome was a collector  
He gathered rocks sticks gems  
And nectar. 

He pursued what was neat  
And consumed anything sweet.   
He developed a hankering for things  
And a cavity for feeling. 

The sugar opened a hole  
Both in tooth and soul. 

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Little Gnome