Thank you so much, you have no idea what this means to me! :)  


This is the first time I made something like this. Thank you from the bottom of my heart!

I love your choice of words so much. You reveal vivid imagery without going on and on with adjectives which is the balance I myself am trying to find with my own writing. The last stanza made me think about a lot of people in my life, it begets analogy to personal experiences. Really good job!

Like I mentioned in my last reply, this is the first time I did something like this, so you have no idea what your comment means to me. Thank you!

The other comment hit the nail.

That last line was great. It really comes put powerful.

Your words have such a sexy feel to them. They do not feel forced, but comfortable in use and that is satisfying. Thank you


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*As the blackest nights beget,*

*wickest gleams fall clear,*

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*Beneath a subtle of sore,*

*buried deep, under own vamoose,*

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*A stalking linger, patience of a moon,*

*Dreams for chance, its seal break loose,*

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*Lurking, glancing,*

*my core froze,*

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*a pick to starve it out,*

*slay it still,*

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*prowling teeth grow near,*

*an offer his lips chose,*

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*a fierce eye torched,*

*a sneer inflamed,*

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*why destroy a thing,*

*desperate to be tamed.* 

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