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Thank u so much!
Wishing u a healthy recovery!! 
Lots of love  💖💖

This one hits home for me...
As a recovering self-harmer, this perfectly describes how I felt when I would self harm.

The line "Please make me bleed, but make me breathe, my lord" spoke powerfully  to me. 

It's not that death was what I craved, but to just feel something...

Beautiful words, please keep writing💕

Thank u so much... it rly means a lot that other ppl going thru the same thing as me can connect with me through my words!

❣️❣️

God damn this was tragically beautiful. Unfortunately I’m able to relate.
“The universe in my skin and I scrape the crust for gold”

For me I personally feel like that line describes exactly how I feel when I look back at my scars. I’m the universe, I am beautiful and holy and forever growing. But I hurt myself not seeing the value in me, im looking for the gold, but I’m already the prize; Hurting myself in hopes feeling the value that I already have.

This was an amazing read, thank you
Sending much love to you <3

Thank you!!
I agree with all these criticisms! Rly appreciate this <33

Holy shit. There’s some essence that is created when the human body is compared to that of the universe. 

I’m a sense it makes it stand out saying “I may seem insignificant but watch my significance”

The line of comparing cuts and scars on the skin to meteors. *chefs kiss*. Absolutely slaps. Made me gasp out loud. 

A couple of wording feedback. For the first line, personally I would change it to a more possessive form:
> My scarlet stained hands crave your mercy

For the second stanza’s first line, I’d get rid of and if you’re going to use a comma, it flows better like that anyways imo

I’m actually wondering if the third line was done on purpose like this. Using O instead of oh and U instead of you. 

Commas for body parts for the second stanza’s fifth line:
> My arms, my thighs, my lips

Wording for the “please make me bleed…” line:
> Please make me bleed, but LET me breathe…

I feel like it gives it more of a sense of reluctance that way. Where as “make me bleed, but make me brea

Thank u thank u thank u so much for this
This genuinely made me smile like an idiot
I rly appreciate u 💕💕

Based on self-harm, and it is called "Dear God"? I had to read this one!

Actually, the more I've read it over, the more I wanted to cry.

  
First thing to notice, the first line, "My hands stained scarlet crave your mercy" (nice alliteration there), might be a reference to Isaiah 1:18, "Your sins are presently like scarlet...", describing the fallen spiritual state of Israel on account of their sinning against their God, and their assurance for the mercy they crave from Him according to the rest of the chapter. I think it's prudent to point this out, given the subject of the poem, since the narrator would potentially be identifying with what the Biblical Jews felt at that time in the canon -- that their shortcomings merited their suffering, losing the nation of Israel, to the narrator's shortcomings catalyzing the need to suffer by losing the blood in their body. The second line is amazing also; "My ichor paints my thighs a colour unholy", in that it can simultaneously represent the 

Thank uuu
Sending lots of love ❣️❣️

holy shit this is beautiful. "the universe in my skin and i scrape the crust for gold" is a genius line. i’m gonna have to reread this a lot more often. hope you’re well, friend.

TW: The poem is based on $elf-harm, bur has no direct mentions

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Dear God

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My hands stained scarlet crave your mercy

My ichor paints my thighs a colour unholy

A sage so wicked

I set out on this quest

Of my blood thirst to quench 

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The universe in my skin, and I scrape the crust for gold

The acid in my eyes emanates a divine glow

O look into these galaxies if u dare

Find meteor trails on my hips

My arms my thighs my lips

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I'm human no more, just flesh and bones with a spirit in torment

And here I kneel, surrendering my carcass, your devotee so ardent

Nothing but a mere request I beseech

Please make me bleed, but make me breathe, my lord

So that my spirit shall lament for eons...

Amen.

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