Little goblin
running on a path of shiny pebbles.
.
hold your sack tight
to keep it heavy
to keep you safe
to keep you alive.
.
But since they say
The future is now
You should just stop,
lie down.
Pick up a shiny little pebble,
look at it closely,
let your eyes
be a mirror for your brain,
right now.
.
Or keep searching,
running and saving.
.
it's up to you.
.
but remember:
in the end you will be
your infinite moments.
.
Feedback:
Posted Jan 7, 2023, 7:46 AM UTC
I absolutely adore the visual imagery you invoke, with a very interesting structure. I can just imagine the goblin pausing and staring in deep thought, not to mention many other meanings I could derive from this poem. Great Work!
thank you for the reply. I really tried to use the "surrealist" part of me this time. This poem is about enjoying the present moment. Sometimes, just like the goblin, you keep thinking about your future and you make sacrifices for later thinking that one day you will be happy. This is a pretty mature mentality but if you never take your time to enjoy the present moment you will never be happy because you will be too concerned about "saving things for later". I like to think that our life is made of infinite 'presents', in a way that today is as important as tomorrow. I hope you all find balance.
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