[2690] Spy of the Mind (Full First Chapter)

Thank you for any feedback. This is the first chapter of a novel I am working on. It is a fantasy story about a spy with psychic powers who is trying to work her way into an enemy city. If you want to read my query letter for more details, here is the link:

https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/15pk00q/qcrit_adult_fantasy_spy_of_the_mind_95k_words_2nd/

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Here is a list of my critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/15qukhh/4243_im_nathan_dammit/jw8tr4x/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/15wft2b/1870_the_first_witch_familiar/jx1fr1d/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/15wk60g/1195_the_last_journey_of_the_alver/jx1qgrr/?context=3

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Here is the link to my first chapter:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MbEPoOqfs7l7J7eZuagSBjNUM-ReRhB22qRecAONKvE/edit?usp=sharing

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