Hi DRs,

If you're a fan of Carver and Russell Banks, you may warm to this. (and I stress may).

A major rewrite of Ver 1. This would not have been possible without DRs generous critiques. You know who you are. 

Questions

Does it flow well?

Does it feel credible ie is it  packing too much into too small a time/space?

Could it be shortened? If so, where? How?

[Green Valley 1971 Ver 2](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NenMk80LA_qz047uEbAjrkldZf9_4Lz-wzSOAi5Ri1U/edit?usp=sharing)

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**Past crits**  
The Reality Conservation Effort (Version 2) 3245  
RCE Ver 2 Crit part 1  
[RCE 1](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16vo5t7/comment/k2t529n/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)

RCE Ver 2 Crit part 2  
[RCE 2](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16vo5t7/comment/k2t53dh/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)  
Stolen Flowers 2235

[SF](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16oy403/comment/k2z1ihp/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)  
Horizon Effect 482

[HE](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16jj4je/comment/k0zankv/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)  
Perfect Man 3023

[PM](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16edkc2/comment/k0om18o/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)

[708] Green Valley