Hi there! This is technically a ghost story, but heavy on the romance (it will eventually be NSFW but right now it's not). I struggle with the technical side of writing, so I'm hoping to get feedback on grammar, mechanics, and show vs. tell moments (I am trying really hard to get better about this so if you see moments where I slip please I'd appreciate pointing it out). Thank y'all!

[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YFs4HxFRmIQo4rqyLolp5ya5OTWUAYtG-inexFJPp1I/edit?tab=t.0](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YFs4HxFRmIQo4rqyLolp5ya5OTWUAYtG-inexFJPp1I/edit?tab=t.0)

  
My critiques:

[Romance two different chapters one version](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1igd1wr/comment/md7dldd/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)

[The Carrion Gospels - Chapter 1: Baptism of Entropy](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1icbzk4/comment/magtjyi/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)

[The Bug Collector](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1icncrh/comment/m9wyqqf/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)

[Lucifer's Tears](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1i9fijn/comment/m9keerx/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)

[1444] A Southern Ghost Story