[1090] Job Hunting: A Short Shadowrun Character Story

I am enjoying this little community, but feel weird about critiquing without at least putting myself out there as a writer.

I wrote this as a background intro for a Shadowrun TTRPG character character that I never really got to play, sadly. I was going for a feel like the short, atmospheric stories found between chapters in RPG books to introduce readers to the setting.

Story link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/15l4TzMeG-AOTI2Via5T7H8V-ufN422XldEfn158YNK0/edit?usp=sharing

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