[3531] Cockroach King

This is a story inspired by Haken's "Cockroach King" which I wrote after trying to internalize what I learned from George Saunders' "A Swim in a Pond in the Rain". Thinking about bringing the elements you start with to the ending, and respecting narrative patterns but not so much that the end is predictable. So I took a risk with this ending and I want to primarily know if it hits. Again this could be nothing or something.

Of course open to any other feedback.

Story:

Cockroach King

Crits:

[885] Left Alone

[1708] First Half of Ch. 1

[1790] Going Abroad

[2514] Immaterial Contest, Ch. 15

[1227] Immaterial Contest, Ch. 1