Kiss Me Like This

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##Kiss Me Like This

 Kiss me like a stranger
     hesitant and questioning
          is this okay
     shock of hair between your eyes
          can I – may I
     feathering like fumbled rain
          should I stop or
   
 Kiss me like a
      brash illicit paramour
          no, we can't, we
     hurried glances, stolen time
          feels so right it
     secretly in corridors
          we'll get caught for
   
 Kiss me like
     rough, behind the laundromat
          I need you so
     torrid, needful, calloused hands
          fuck! you drive me
     poolside at a cheap motel
          be quick, love, be
 
 Kiss me
     like you kiss her


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Author's Note: this is a rough-edit draft.  That means that, although it's been through the Brutal Edit Machine™ once or twice, the final result is still very much in flux. I'm putting this out there more in the hopes that others can help workshop the basic premise of the idea, and give me some feedback on whether the central conceit is worth exploring further.  It is not intended to be the final, cut-in-granite, unchangeable fixture of words that I usually present.  With that in mind, thank you for reading, and offering your commentary.  

Posted Sep 5, 2016, 11:43 PM UTC · edited

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