[1933] The Orange Circus

Hello again! I apologize for the re-post. I didn't realize my previous critiques weren't detailed enough for a 3k submission, so I did a few more critiques that were more in depth and cut down my own word count. Again, I apologize! Hopefully the new critiques are sufficient.

Proof:

Critique One [865]

Critique Two [1045]

[Other critiques I did that might suffice for under 3k]

Critique Three [618]

Critique Four [1707]

Critique Five [2391]

While I appreciate all the line editors out there, this is quite a rough draft so I am aware there might be some spelling/grammar mistakes. That being said, I'd prefer a more general critique although line edits are welcome if you see something completely awful. I am particularly looking for feedback on pacing, description, and characterization. I have a difficult time knowing if I am going too slow or too fast, being overly flowery or not descriptive enough, if my characters are flat, etc. But any other feedback is also greatly appreciated! NOTE: The Orange Circus is a working title, not official.

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