[1878] The Bluefish From Skylark's

Alright, I had posted here before - Scenes From a Cafe in Madrid and I took the advice, worked on the story but was getting frustrated and decided I needed something new and wrote this new story.

This is around the second-third draft of this story and I'm confident it's much better than my last submission. I know there are still flaws in it and I'm sending it here to see if this community can help me iron some of them out.

My Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OaG11O6Z2m484ybXMOXSXGlH8-Xm_grrTcwZtc7RIu4/edit?usp=sharing

My Critiques: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/90lc6f/1104_arrival/

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8zq55u/1000_a_different_perspective_title_subject_to/

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8yy9py/1121_my_boy_short_story_on_drug_abuseinner_demons/