[2475] Resonance Ch2

Here's the second chapter of my novel, and the last I'll post here (your comments are crazy helpful, but I'm aiming for traditional publishing once it's finished). I know characterization won't be an issue with this one like it was with my first, but I know it still needs work. This chapter introduces the second MC/POV, and I'd appreciate your help. Thanks in advance!

Chapter 2

For reference:

Chapter One

Critiques:

[1878] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/91hhs4/1878_the_bluefish_from_skylarks/e2zg6p5

[1259] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/91m88p/1259_the_chronicle/e2z8k83