Wow. It's been so long since I posted here, my hands are shaking. Hello r/Destructivereaders!

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[In the Tower of the Old Queen](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GK7dZ809-B3lTOpyXdaFQcvzT8VVQ1WMHHaE5LAb4xI/edit?usp=sharing)

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This is a standalone short story I've been working on.  All feedback is welcome. Plot, pacing, and character notes would be most useful but if language nitpicks are your thing, that's fine too. 

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Specifically, I'm wondering if I should restructure a very, very long monologue in the middle, or if it works as-is. Also, the title is a working title, so new suggestions are welcome. 

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Look upon my Crits, ye Mods, and despair:

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[\[3202\] Gone Genie Gone](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9dj24f/3202_gone_genie_gone/)

[\[535\] The Gift of Innocence](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9dfpim/535_the_gift_of_innocence/)

[\[1920\] Shortcuts](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9ezkhy/1920_shortcuts/)

[\[1543\] The Price of Amethyst](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9gypqi/1543_the_price_of_amethyst_short_story/)

[\[2045\] The Bat People](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9m751k/2045_the_bat_people/)

[\[2996\] Virgin Dawn: Chapter 1](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9n4k8d/2996_virgin_dawn_chapter_1/)

[\[4533\] Virgin Dawn: Chapter 2](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9owvn4/4533_virgin_dawn_chapter_2_judgement/)

[\[2502\] The Valkyrie and the Viking: Nerthus](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9wwvpo/2502_the_valkyrie_and_the_viking_nerthus/)

[2711] In the Tower of the Old Queen