W a l l p a p e r
Why do you touch me like
You are trying to find the creases in my wallpaper?
Is it so you can peer at the wall behind?
You'd be surprised;
They're painted the exact color of your eyes.
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Posted Sep 15, 2020, 5:58 PM UTC · edited
I like this a lot! Really cool idea. I think you could maybe make it a bit more personal if you described the color of the eyes, either just with an actual color or a personifying adjective you feel best describes that person; for example "They're painted the same violent blue as your eyes." You could also consider describing the eyes as a color that isn't usually found in eyes (red, purple, yellow, etc) as a form of symbolism, or just to make it more abstract. Just some things to consider, either way really interesting work!
Thank you so much for your feedback! I'll tweak it some more. <3