I'm in love
You make me feel like an idiot.
I'm trying to get close to you,
But I'm clearly not good at it.
You make me feel like an idiot
I'm so in love
Because you're still there for me
When I mess up.
Posted Aug 24, 2021, 8:14 PM UTC
I really like it! I love the style of the poem. Short, straightforward and great to read. I also like the repetitions of verse 1 and 2, it has an effect on the poem (a good one), which I can't pinpoint. Really nice! :)
Thank you so much!
This reminds me of something. It is okay when you love someone sometimes you do things that you or others may not understand. It is an amazing feeling though.
I agree :)
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Thank you! I tend to err on the side of keeping things short because there's less room for me to mess up what would have been a great poem if I had stopped adding more. Thanks for that criticism though! I'll definitely try to write more lines next time. Thank you!
*Ah, good luck my friend
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Same bro same
This poem reminds me of my trials with love. It’s such a precarious game of doing the right thing either for yourself or your significant other. Your poem tells me that I’m not the only one. Beautiful poem
Thank you!