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Mississippi Drinks

-Mississippi drinks-

Mrs. Sippi drinks on you

A lovely evening your Beauty Brew

A Tonic colour, my boats on you

Fishing wheeling no Catfish tunes

Oh Mississippi Oh Mississippi my drinks on you,

Golden showers as clouds reigns through

Colored and shining, your bars so high

Stumbling hard and rumbling waves my loves on you

As thunder strikes its electric you, care to dance the boogaloo?

Your water, your right, with my life I’d hydrate you

My tackle box, in you’re river its lost

Forever gone in fall season

I lost my favourite hook in you

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First post: a short, simple poem from a recent short story I wrote (untitled) : OCPoetry (reddit.com)

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/pcsltp/the_more_clever_hound/

Posted Aug 27, 2021, 9:54 PM UTC

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Now read it as though Mr. Sippi is a woman ;), and thank you very much I appreciate it!

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