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A 10 Proof Moonshine

My drinks not real, how are you?

My ten shoes choose shine they choose you

In the taste of the Moonshine you’re starlight proof

My hearts not groomed its raw on you

It’s simple you see with my eyes on you

I’d rather wake to the mountain dew

Sparkled skies and windy dreams

With rocky cliffs and fired eyes

loving songs daylight drifts

I’d hike the mountain in a sprite with you

Only to find in morning waters mountain dew dream dry

But still – Id rather – a crush on you

Then losing another drink to that silly moon

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-Mississippi drinks-

Mrs. Sippi drinks on you

A lovely evening your Beauty Brew

A Tonic colour, my boats on you

Fishing wheeling no Catfish tunes

Oh Mississippi Oh Mississippi my drinks on you,

Golden showers as clouds reigns through

Colored and shining, your bars so high

Stumbling hard and rumbling waves my loves on you

As thunder strikes its electric you, care to dance the boogaloo?

Your water, your right, with my life I’d hydrate you

My tackle box, in you’re river its lost

Forever gone in fall season

I lost my favourite hook in you

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Peppering poultry

Is it poetry?

Hand to the salt shaking it hoarsely

A meticulous art covering it flowerily

To move past the eyes that see it chorally

In vigor, a sweet citrus trigger

Drawn by taste, to hunger wryly

Don’t over cook, or you’ll be mouthing dryly

How does the poultry supply me?

Well its molten mileage

Casted by a saucer, instrumental temperamental

To Sauté the Entrée

Temperature fast, hot n’ high

Tips test for tastes

Let the Poetry leave its trace

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To illustrate the depth in a wrecking blue

Its Like towers falling, leaving no traces no clues

Filled with Sorrow forms and sirens of ghostly tunes

Only in time does Sadness resumes

Nothing in sight, but messy dunes

To dust my self off always feels to soon

For A heart that moves through oceans

Stuck in sands of the echoing eons

I move my eyes, I move my groove

Must pass the dust, and find new dawn

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Quintessential elemental

Life’s a rental beyond what’s mental

The touch to hands soft yet gentle

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High in the air upon loft

Quite the nerves as you speak to me offed

Bluntly scutter as I am feeling scoffed

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Emotion in commotion as wind my mind

A dirty potion beyond sincere devotion

What once was broken to never be opened

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Unwind with time to find my twine

Flooding feelings to find my shine

A year to the day, and I find my lines

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No price to pay except your fines

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