Moonshine Mountain You

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I dont know if it was your intention, but I found it to be rambling and disjointed. It was well suited to it and i felt as if the character/author was indeed intoxicated. it was raw and i liked that.

this poem feels like it could easily be a song by how the lines flow with every word. it sounds like someone who is intoxicated is singing this which i don't know if you intended but it elevates the poem! thanks for sharing :)