[3408] No One Knows Where The Pumpkins Go

(Ok, probably more humorous tragedy than spooky. Elements of both.)

Hi!

This is a silly story that developed into a more absurd story. I think I may want to develop it into a short animated film. My big questions are:

1. Is the prose overkill?
2. Is the scenery vivid?
3. Does the climax have tension?
4. Do you feel anything for the characters?
5. If this were a short film, what medium do you imagine is best? (Animation, stop-motion, claymation?)

I really appreciate the feedback!

SUMMARY: It's love at first sight when Eduardo the pumpkin meets Marianne. Can the power of belief and a little Halloween magic bring the pair together? Or is their love doomed to vanish with the first of November?

The story: No One Knows Where the Pumpkins Go

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