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TheAnxiousCrab4

Speck Of Sand

She invites me to a party, pulling me along by hand.

My heart is on fire my legs can barely stand.

Her eyes glow blindingly and when I see her mine do too,

Then I notice all the eyes surrounding you.

It's suddenly so hard for you to hear me.

I'm merely a speck of sand,

On the beach of your motherland,

I never have the upper hand, you're always distracted by another glance.

A background character so mundane,

I doubt she even remembers my name.

I become overlooked, faceless in the crowd.

Her voice is the only one I can hear out loud.

Like Deja Vu, I can see right through you.

I know that I'm just another "friend" to add to the group.

I know you will never feel the way, I feel about you

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/rtfj24/two_heathens_without_a_prayer/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/rti20u/i_lost_myself/

Posted Jan 1, 2022, 12:17 PM UTC

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bluzzo•

"Her eyes glow blindingly and when I see her mine do too,
Then I notice all the eyes surrounding you."

this image definitely left me feeling kinda heartbroken. great way to reuse words but have different meanings each time.

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