[1400] Prey

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15nIMYTXCMV0Tkue5M9w273fzMOiVi1apU3P-2noCXzE/edit

Here is the intro for my urban fantasy novel. I do not have too much requests, just wondering if this piece right here is suited for an intro. I am not fluent in English so there can be some grammar issues so sorry about that.

I am just wondering if this piece right here is enjoyable and readable. Is it make you wonder for more?

Critiques are here (rereworked)

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/x39fhp/2146_scifi_mecha_fight_scene/io58cyn/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/x7vucd/1737_the_cruel_hour/io5dfh2/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/xadq55/1554_october_surprise_part_3/io5r1ip/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/x6x728/1533_silma/io5sns9/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3