[3575] Blackrange Ch. 3-4 Excerpt

Story

Some background:

Just over a year ago, Alex's husband was shot and his body was left for her to find. Since then, she hasn't done much but day-drink, party, and refer to herself in the third-person in an attempt to distance herself from the loss. Today, though, the wallowing will have to wait: she's just been called into her best friend's shop to use her Fluency to translate the text of an ancient book. But the book's contents aren't what anyone expected, and the cursed thing leaks potent, reality-altering levels of magic.

Currently in this weird place where I can't decide whether to move on from this idea or not. Here are some safe chapters.

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