[4124] The Finest Wheel

gdoc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BNrdCikJz7jEG8FF-8aWhNMxINasO7376wVaelvD-_E/edit?usp=sharing

pdf: https://drive.google.com/file/d/10GTDy3dYQ-qMPA03XxUU_9uqQsbNIztK/view?usp=sharing

I had trouble splitting this up into two parts as I don't think they make much sense separately and there isn't a natural joint, so I hope it's compelling enough to justify the length.

Likewise I hope my critiques are sufficient, I can do more if necessary, probably another two in the next 12 hours.

I am curious about how early you figure out the "twist" and how the language flows, there is an intentional blurring of a specific character voice and a more general narrator.

The other questions I have about this piece are kind of spoilerish so I will omit them here.

Thank you very much for reading, if you do get around to it.

critiques:

1963

1677

1239

708

2600

2102

Total word count of critiqued works: 10,289