OKAY. I finished my edits for this short story and I'm out of ideas for improvements, so what should I edit in the next draft? Or IDK, just general reactions or ideas? This is my first short story (!!!) and I'm definitely no expert at the craft so, lol. Help. I'm writing these short stories for fun so they're good practice!

Some meta stuff: >!This takes place around 1,450 BC in an alternate realm colloquially called heaven, one parallel to but separate from earth and humans. It's based on Ugaritic mythology, woohoo! (So don't ask me how a swamp grows under a mountain given the low light. Sdjkssd) And Yam, the protagonist of this story, is the main antagonist of the Maverick/Dylan one when he gets older if you're familiar with those submissions, so have fun with that knowledge.!<

BASIC INFO

Conquest of Death
Short Story
Genre: Mythology, Fantasy, fanfiction based on mythology (Age group: MG? Jay thinks so and I think I agree given the theme 🧐)

Summary: The god of the ocean seeks out and challenges his brother, the god of death.

LINK

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